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In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

Young
people
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 find it difficult to communicate with older
people
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 because maybe they’re have some reasons that
don’t
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 want to talk with or not brave enough to talk or afraid to talk with older
people
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 or maybe some of them of older
people
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 are
don’t
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 understand about what younger
people
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 have say, I think that’s why maybe the young
people
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don’t
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 want to talk with older
people
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 and the solutions is we’re have to be more confidence when we’re talk and with older
people
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,
don’t
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 be afraid to them,
don’t
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 be anxious, speak and talk clear so older
people
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 can really understand what you or younger
people
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 are actually saying.

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task response
Make your view clear in the first line. Start with a line that says what you think about the topic.
task response
Give 2 main reasons why it is hard to talk with older people, then give 2 ideas to fix it.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: intro, reason 1, reason 2, solution 1, solution 2, then a short end.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words like and, but, because, so to keep the flow of ideas
content
The topic is clear and there is a plan to talk about it.
structure
There are some good ideas about how to fix the issue.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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