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Writing Samples
Band 2

In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

The reason why
that
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young people find to communicate with
an
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older is a gap generation of age.
It’s
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 because
the
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young people always have their own thinking
Linking Words
such
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as
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in my case my grandmother and I
we
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always have a problem with my
wake up morning
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wake-morning
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 routine I don’t like doing anything too
quick
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quickly
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 I like to take my time once I wake up.
It’s
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 like just
to be
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being
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 on my phone and
then
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get on
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getting
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 dressed and
make
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making
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 some coffee for
slowly
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 life but my grandma doesn’t understand at all even
I
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though I
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told her that we have time to go out or go somewhere. I’ve planned before going anywhere all the
times
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however
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 she still worries about me if I were late I
will
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would
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 miss the benefit from
a
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company.
It’s
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 important to set
new
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a new
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 routine how to maintain a better routine throughout the day that’s all I want to do with her.
It’s
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 the best solution
on
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 it.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay needs a clear introduction that states the main idea. Also, include a conclusion that summarizes your points.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more complete sentences and avoid run-on sentences for better clarity.
task achievement
Improve the explanation of your examples to make the reasons stronger and clearer.
task achievement
You provided a personal example which makes your essay relatable.
task achievement
You addressed the main topic of communication difficulties between young and older people.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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