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The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
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The two charts below display information about the
percentage
 of adults who spent
time
 doing a variety of different types of activities during the working
day
 in a particular country between 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, employees
people
 in
this
 particular country spent the most amount of
time
 in the
day
, in both 1958 and 2008, at
work
.
In contrast
,
people
 spent the least
time
 doing other activities
such
 as playing sports or setting up new hobbies. In 1958, working
people
 in
this
 country spent one-third of their
day
 at
work
, followed by just under one-third of their
day
 sleeping. Going out with friends or family took up the next largest portion of
time
 in a
day
, reaching 19%. Meanwhile,
traveling
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travelling
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 to
work
 was the activity that took up the
last
 second
percentage
 of
time
 someone’s
day
. Fifty years ago, the
percentage
 of a
day
people
 spent at
work
 increased to 42%,
while
 the figure for sleeping had dropped to 25%.
Moreover
, the
percentage
 of
time
 in a
day
people
 go out with family and friends had a significant dropped off, peaking at 6%, but more
time
 was allocated to relaxing at home (13%). the figure for
traveling
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travelling
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 to
work
 had a little rose, reaching 8% over the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, time, day, people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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