The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered

the Olympics since it began.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features,

and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph shows information concerning the total of
participants
between 1924 and 2012, and the bar graph illustrates changes in the figure of
participants
who attended the
Olympics
by gender.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the number of
Olympics
participants
continued to increase throughout the period.
This
figure increased from less than 4,000 in 1924 to more than 10,000 in 2012. Looking at the bar graph closely, it is easily observed that much more males have participated in the
Olympics
than females.
In particular
, there is almost no women's competition in 1924,
while
3000 men entered the
Olympics
.
However
,
due to
the rapid growth in female participation, the gender gap narrowed gradually over the period. In 2012, there was only a 10,000 disparity in participation between females and males.
Also
, it is noteworthy that the
Olympics
have experienced growth in the whole sum of
participants
. The statistic of
participants
more than doubled during the period.
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