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The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones.

The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones.
The graphs below display the percentages of residents for work
hours
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 per
week
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 in the manufactory sector in four countries in European in 2002.
Overall
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, most people spent around 36 to 40
hours
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 working in a
week
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,
therefore
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 they worked 8
hours
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 per day.
However
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, in
France
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, most clients spent less time working, they just worked 31 to 35
hours
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 per
week
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. In
France
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, approximately 35 per
cent
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 of employees spent 36 to 40
hours
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 working compared with 50 per
cent
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 in the UK and 70 per
cent
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 in Denmark,
furthermore
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, 80 per
cent
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 of workers in Sweden spent 8
hours
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 working every day.
However
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, the figure for employees who spent under 15
hours
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 in their jobs per
week
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 was low in
this
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 period, roughly 10 per
cent
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 in
France
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 and Denmark contrasted with under 9 per
cent
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 in Sweden and the UK.
Moreover
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, in the UK large percentages of workers spent more than 50
hours
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 in their industry working, reaching 20 per
cent
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,in comparison, to less than 10 per
cent
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 in other countries
such
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 as
France
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. In Denmark, similar percentages of workers spent a different amount of time working, including those who worked under 35
hours
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 or more than 40
hours
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 per
week
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, peaking at 10 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, france, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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