The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate an industrial area in the town of Norbiton nowadays and the development plan for the future.
Overall
, the planned future development aims to turn the industrial area in Norition into a residential.
Now, the region is industrial. It contains eight factories in the middle, centred by a square. The river is on the north with no direct access to the farmland behind. Linking Words
While
the town is on the west.
The planned future development tends to turn the zone into a residential zone. It will have seven housings, six nearly in the area itself and one can be reached through a bridge that crosses the river. Linking Words
In addition
, a School, a playground and a medical centre will be built and Linking Words
also
shops.The school will be built in the east, Linking Words
while
the medical centre and the shops are in the south. Linking Words
However
, the housing will have good access to all the facilities in the zone. Linking Words
Lastly
, a new roundabout Linking Words
in
the south road will be created.Change preposition
on
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