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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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As the world develops, humans are having more choices in terms of food, which means people would be more aware of their food consumption in order to be healthy.
As a result
, many suggest that a diet without meat or fish is beneficial to our wellness
as well as
 the world. In my perspective, there are many aspects that should be considered about
this
 opinion. In terms of health benefits, it is obvious that meat and fish contain a higher amount of fat, especially cholesterol, than vegetables and beans, which could be harmful to
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the human’s
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human’s
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human
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 body.
For instance
; Cholesterol is proven to cause heart disease and obesity.
Therefore
 a person who eats meat or fish regularly would consume more cholesterol
to
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in
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 their body than a vegetarian or vegan, which leads to a higher chance of getting those diseases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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