The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The picture illustrates the modifications from 1950 to 2010 at West

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park

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Secondary School.

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, we see that school all

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have been

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the

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,but in 1980

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expand and started to be a main building,

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science

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block

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stay

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and in 2010. In 1950 and 1980 playground has similar space, but in 2010 it decrease

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a third. And

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this

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place

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located

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sports fields

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in 1980 was bigger

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three

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time

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place

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was a farmland which disappeared over

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, in 1950 was houses near

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road and schools,

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modified

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car

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park

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science

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block

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Car

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park

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expanded and took up half of the area.

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located

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across the houses and school, and after 1980 across the schools,

science

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block

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and

car

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park

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. Farmland and houses disappeared from the map,

playground

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was abridged, and there were built

science

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block

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blocks

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car

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and sports

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

166 words

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air polution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both view and give your own opinion.