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Some people think that going to a fitness centre regularly is unnecessary. Instead, they believe that combining occasional exercise (such as going for walks) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, how the person prefers regular
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 centres.but other people are not regularly attending the
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centre
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 because it is not important .,
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 I believe that basic requirements in health exercise
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 as most think to walk.
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 with, the individual is the best part of our lives in health and it is a requirement that benefit in healthy growth so that people that always prefer to join
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 class because nowadays Keeping the body healthy is essential but in rural areas humankind ,not made that body
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 but now not going to the
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 centres. On the other hand, now
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 thing that young people always walk in daily activity and balance to eat cuisine in our daily life best of the energy.
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, health is very beneficial for that and walking is the best part of well-being so I
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 supported that exercise for own day does not attend
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