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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bad charts show the
salary
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 comparison of different four vocations; police, nurse,
fire fighter
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firefighter
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 and underground driver in the UK,
while
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 the table provides the data
of
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on
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 the average
hours
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 per
weel
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week
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 for these professions.
Overall
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, all professions have experienced a slight increase in
salary
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 over three years, with the
salary
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 range for four jobs ranging from 38h to 55h.
Firstly
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, working individuals in all occupations have seen a slight increase in their income compared to when they started working. Police workers were
initially
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 paid ￡21000 rising to ￡23000 after three years.
I
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In
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 the same way,
income
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the income
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 of
nurse
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nurses
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 went from ￡18000 to ￡19000, firefighters
￡40000
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from ￡40000
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 to ￡41000, and the highest
salary
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 belongs to underground drivers
￡50000
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from ￡50000
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 to ￡51000.
Secondly
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, average working
hours
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 are between ￡38 and ￡55, and there is a correlation between the amount of pay and working
hours
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 except
underground
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for underground
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 drivers, The average working
hours
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 of policemen is 40h, nurses 38h, and firefighters 55h,
which
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while
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 means that the longer they work, the more income they gain.
However
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, only underground
driver
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drivers
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 can earn the highest
salary
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 of ￡50000 to ￡51000 as described above, though they work the shortest 36h weekly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, hours, h with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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