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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bad charts show the
salary
 comparison of different four vocations; police, nurse,
fire fighter
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firefighter
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 and underground driver in the UK,
while
 the table provides the data
of
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on
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 the average
hours
 per
weel
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week
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 for these professions.
Overall
, all professions have experienced a slight increase in
salary
 over three years, with the
salary
 range for four jobs ranging from 38h to 55h.
Firstly
, working individuals in all occupations have seen a slight increase in their income compared to when they started working. Police workers were
initially
 paid ￡21000 rising to ￡23000 after three years.
I
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In
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 the same way,
income
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the income
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 of
nurse
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nurses
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 went from ￡18000 to ￡19000, firefighters
￡40000
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from ￡40000
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 to ￡41000, and the highest
salary
 belongs to underground drivers
￡50000
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from ￡50000
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 to ￡51000.
Secondly
, average working
hours
 are between ￡38 and ￡55, and there is a correlation between the amount of pay and working
hours
 except
underground
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for underground
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 drivers, The average working
hours
 of policemen is 40h, nurses 38h, and firefighters 55h,
which
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while
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 means that the longer they work, the more income they gain.
However
, only underground
driver
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drivers
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 can earn the highest
salary
 of ￡50000 to ￡51000 as described above, though they work the shortest 36h weekly.
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