Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Investing in building sophisticated
sports
facilities
is often done by some countries in order to achieve victory in international
sports
competition
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.
This
might cause a problem
due to
the inadequacy
public
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of public
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sports
facilities
that everyone can use.
This
essay argues that
although
it brings national pride, it
also
has its negative aspects for
citizen
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citizens
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. It is evident that improvising infrastructure for elite athletes is one of the
priority
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of
government's
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the government's
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blueprint for winning high prizes
such
as the Olympics.
Besides
,
this
will inspire
citizen
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citizens
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to exercise more. Having a good reputation for
sports
also
can improve
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the country
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country
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image for a specific sport,
therefore
it could boost the national economy through tourism and trading.
On the other hand
, providing more
sports
facilities
that everyone can access, might encourage people to workout more.
Hence
,
this
might reduce
the
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health care
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spending. Physical activity is vital to prevent chronic diseases
such
as heart
diseases
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disease
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, diabetes, and stroke
that
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which
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account for most of the healthcare expenditure. The appropriate
sports
area can reduce
the
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sport
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injury because of the limited
facilities
.
Besides
, the tax is paid by the community every year. It should
contributes
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for
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the people's wellness publicly not just one elite community
that is
limited for everyone.
Consequently
,
this
might improve people's life which eventually can boost economic growth
due to
the
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increasing productivity. In conclusion,
while
improving
sports
building for athletes in order to win high prizes is necessary, it is important to provide public
sports
facilities
for
long-term
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investment of national residents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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