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Some people believe school children should help to create rules their schools. Others say teacher alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #school #children #rules #schools #teacher
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Nowadays people tend to believe
teachers
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fair
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 enough to set the
rules
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,
while
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 others consider
school
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children
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 should help the
school
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 when it comes to
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 the
rules
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.
This
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 to discuss both of these views and give an opinion
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 to make
children
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 and teacher
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complementary to each other.
First,
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teachers
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 play a crucial role
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 setting a regulation at any
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. In
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, based on
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 massive experience that
teachers
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 have, they must share their experience to set up a
school
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 system.
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,
Teachers
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 see the
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 from
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 angle as they work
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 not learning.
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teachers
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 should be taken into account.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 might
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 as an additional factor but they are not. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that they
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sharing
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 every moment with each other so it is not fair enough to set
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restrictive
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 for
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children
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 as a robot. In other
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,
children
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 should be in a
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 process indirectly
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 is mainly
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 their tendency for
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 so the process might be through
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,
questionnaire
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questionnaires
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, etc. In conclusion,
although
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teachers
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 consider a virtual and
favor
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 for building a system of
rules
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 in a
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.
Children
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 could reach
a more tangible and flexible
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more tangible and flexible rules
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rules
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 as
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they
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 experienced the real
school
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 nature and what it is needing.
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