The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the changing
number
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of shops that were newly opened and bankrupted in a specific country in a seven-year span.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that despite all the fluctuations, the opened merchants showed a more stable pattern,
while
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the closed ones exhibited the opposite.
According to
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the data, the
number
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of new merchants had a more stable pattern than the closed ones. Having started at about 8.500
stores
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in 2011, the
number
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of kiosks fell dramatically to merely 4.000
stores
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in 2012 before gradually increasing to 6,000
stores
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in 2014, slightly lower than the
number
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of bankrupted kiosks in that year.
Then
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it decreased to 4,000 and remained stable for the next two years, from 2015 to 2017, and declined to only 3,000 in 2018. Turning to the closed
stores
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, it captured a more erratic trend. Starting at just above 6,000
stores
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, the
number
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of
stores
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rose to just above 7,000
stores
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in 2013 before plunging to around 500
stores
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in 2015, making it the lowest
number
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of merchants
among
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all years.
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, it increased dramatically to above 5,000
stores
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in 2016 and levelled off for the following two years. (200 words)
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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