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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure avtivites. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Over the past few decades, there is a significant change happened in the
life
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 of a human. It is a public opinion that-,
People
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 spend most of their
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 doing
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.
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 only less
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 for fun activities. In my opinion, There
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 more demerits than merits.
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,
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this
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 essay will explain the pros and cons with examples and will reach a proper conclusion. To embark with, Nowadays, everyone is busy
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 their own
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.
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, we should balance our professional and personal
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. If we
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 continuously it will lead to mental
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, A survey conducted by the World
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 organization (WHO) in 2018, clearly stated that-, the main reason for cardiac and hypertension is
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 stress.
People
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 are more concerned with
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 and not giving any free
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 for themselves.
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, it will reflect badly,
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human beings.
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 the pressure from
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, So many
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 will go through depression or mood swings. Some
people
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 attempt suicide. Even though, they are working hard but still not getting good results. So,
People
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 must spend
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 on their own. It is really important for
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. Giving Some
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 for leisure activities will give more happiness and
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 energy for doing new tasks.
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, Working so long hours sometimes give you money and appreciation. But it will spoil your
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.
Health
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 is wealth. If the worker does more
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, some companies, provide rewards or incentives to encourage employees. So the employees become happy and they
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 even
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harder for the next month.
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 is a business trick, But
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 could 'nt understand
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. Because they want the incentives.
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, In India, most of the companies will provide overtime payment. Definitely, the person from the low-class family will
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 after the duty hours for the OT payment. On the one side, it is beneficial for them. With
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 money, they can run the family happy. But it will destroy a person's
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.
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, money can't buy happiness. We have only one
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. So enjoy
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 by balancing
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 and leisure
time
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. It will give you a prosperous and happy
life
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.

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