ome people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In

modern

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world, some people thought that

school

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schools

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should prohibit

usage

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of

cellphones

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cell phones

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during the lesson,

on the other hand

, others thought that

students

can use their

phone

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phones

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. From my point of view,

usage

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of mobile

phone

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phones

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has beneficial

as well as

detrimental effects

to

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pupils.

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essay will discuss both

of

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side

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sides

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and give my personal opinion

in

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further

.

To begin

with, it is undeniable that mobile phones are giving many of

informations

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information

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and

knowledges

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knowledge

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to

students

through the

internet

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Internet

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. Thanks to

this

combination, they will access many educational websites,

such

as YouTube, Google and Instructure

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,

students

can

also

share their opinions and

informations

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in applications.

As a result

, their general knowledge and intellectual qualifications will definitely increase considerably

furthermore

, it helps to time saving.

On the

contrary

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utilizing digital

gadget

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gadgets

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is disturbing attention during classes

also

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affects their

health

condition in

bad

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way. To put it another way, if

students

are using their

phone

for knowledge not only but

also

video games, Facebook and Instagram, it

distract

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distracts

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them from learning

furthermore

, their

health

condition will

be deteriorate

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deteriorate

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.

For instance

, always seeing in close things is bad for eye

health

especially

it

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influences farsightedness in teenagers. In conclusion,

Usage

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of mobile

phone

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phones

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has

good

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educational side but

also

has

disadvantage

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disadvantages

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to

health

condition

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conditions

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. In my opinion, under guidance and

observation

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we can decrease the downsides.