Some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

There is an argument that we do not pay attention
on
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advertisements
anymore
while
others think that advertising is
infulenctial
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influential
to persuade
to
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us to
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buy
stuffs
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stuff
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. In my opinion, I believe that
advertisements
is
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important in our society. It is sometimes argued that some
people
think advertising became too normal, so we do not focus on them. One of the major reasons can be that, nowadays we can see a huge amount of
advertisements
everywhere.
For example
, when
people
watch something on Youtube or Instagram, sometimes
advertisements
distrupt
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disrupt
them. So
people
tend to skip those
advertisements
because they might feel that it is wasting their time. Another reason can be that many
advertisements
cause overspending.
This
means that sometimes
advertisements
led them to overspend on
the
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fancy and expensive things even though they do not need
it
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.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that advertising
play
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a vital role in our lives.
Firstly
,
thesedays
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these days
companies can not survive without
advertisement
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advertisements
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.
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mean
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we live in a competitive society so consumers may not spend their money if they could not find any
interseting
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interesting
from
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the goods.
Secondly
, more and more
people
compares
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price or valuable with advertisement.
For instance
, we
are
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normally look at some
advertisement
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advertisements
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before going to buy groceries at the supermarket. So it allows them
choose
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reasonable or valuable
item
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items
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when they expand money to buy things. In conclusion, some
individual
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individuals
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think advertising is unnecessary
while
I am more
convienced
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convinced
that we should not ignore
an
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impact
on
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advertisements
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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