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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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it is certainly true that
humans
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human
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 activities have
a harmful impacts
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a harmful impact
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 on the
evnironment
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environment
 in several forms. In
this
 essay, I will
disucss
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discuss
 how
humans
effect
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affect
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 the
enviornment
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environment
, and I will
recommended
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recommend
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 some measures
can
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that can
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 be taken by authorities and individuals to tackle
this
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these
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 issues.
Firstly
,
Industrial
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revolution
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such
 as,
increase
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the increase
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the
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 number of factories and
cars
 represents the biggest threat to the environment.
This
 is because factories and vehicles release
the
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apply
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CO2 footprint
to
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 the atmosphere, which will
can
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cause air pollution and global warming.
Secondly
, deforestation is caused by
humans
, which
destroy
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destroys
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natural
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nature
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.
For example
, people cut down
forest
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forests
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 in order to produce food , furniture, and clothes. As result a, animals
loss
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lose
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 their habitat and extinct. Regarding solutions, The first measure that the government can take is
introduce
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to introduce
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 harsh laws to set
limit
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limits
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of
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on
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 contamination from factories and
cars
.
Seocnd
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Second
 measure,
thy
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they
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 can impose taxes on the
compaines
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companies
 who cut down trees and make
detrimetnal
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detrimental
 to the ecosystem. Third measure,
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is by
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by
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to
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 encourage people to take public
trasport
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transport
instead
 of
cars
 , which can contribute to
minimize
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minimising
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 the number of vehicles.
Thus
,
reudce
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reduce
 Co2 emissions and
mitigate
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mitigating
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 climate change and global warming. Individuals
also
 should take responsibility toward
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 by adopting some
acitions
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actions
. To being with, they should reduce the consumption of goods namely, food, clothes ,and recycling as much as possible.
Seondly
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Secondly
, people should take
the
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public transport rather than private
cars
 .
Furthermore
, they should take fewer
flight
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flights
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 abroad and spend their holidays locally.
To sum up
, I demonstrated how
humans
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human
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 activities
effect
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affect
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 the ecosystem, and I suggested some steps
can
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that can
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 be taken by governments and individuals to deal with
this
 issue.
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