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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the
quantity
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 of many categories of vegetables exported to
Qatar
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 and
Oman
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 in 1990, with the unit
is
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in tons kilogram.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is
Oman
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 imported more vegetables than
Qatar
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. Another striking factor is that both countries imported a lot of garlic and spinach.
Moreover
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, both countries imported the same type of vegetables in 1990. In 1990, either
Qatar
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 or
Oman
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 imported 300 tons kilogram of ginger.
While
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 ginger account for a fifth in total in
Qatar
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, it occupied a minority in
Oman
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.
Moreover
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, spinach had
a
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high data in both countries (450 in
Qatar
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 and 600 in
Oman
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). One prominent feature of
this
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 data is
while
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 garlic made up a third in
Oman
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, it constituted more than a fifth in
Qatar
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, at 800 and 340 respectively.
In contrast
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, not only
Qatar
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 but
also
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Oman
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 imported a few
of
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broccoli, at 220 for
former
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the former
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 and 300 for the latter.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words qatar, oman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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