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Some people think that THE MAIN PURPOSE of SCHOOL is to turn children to good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #purpose #school #children #citizens #workers #benefit #individuals
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 is to turn children into admirable workers and citizens.
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 of helping them as individuals. I strongly agree and in
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 with, as everybody can see educational systems teach the same subjects and every child. they are regardless of
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' different talents because all
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 care about is making good workers. if a school wanted to benefit our children, they would separate them based on their talents.
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, even
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 with talent in art have to pass hard math exams. Another reason is that educational systems behave
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 with all the
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 neglectful their various personalities.
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 teach a lot of certain values to children to show them how to treat in society, what to do and, what to avoid
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 of teaching them to be good versions of Themselves. As we all know all
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 have the same rules for
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 to follow in order to be accepted as great
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. To say,
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 with different styles are not acceptable in educational systems. Some people believe that in school
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 learn to be good humans
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 they understand what is right and what is wrong.
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, first I would say that They can learn how to behave themselves and from their family.
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in my view
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 are teaching numerous wrong values and it has to be changed. In conclusion, I think it is true that the main purpose of
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 is to make good citizens and workers because of similar behaviour to all
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 and similar subjects for all
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • shaping
  • developing
  • unique talents
  • potential
  • well-rounded
  • academic
  • social
  • emotional development
  • personal growth
  • contribute positively
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • individuality
  • happier and more fulfilled
  • strike a balance
  • preparing students for the workforce
  • nurturing
  • individual needs
  • pursue passions and interests
  • thrive
  • future professionals
  • community institutions
  • shape community values
  • foster civic engagement
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