Some people say that children should learn all the subjects equally. Whereas other think that they should only learn what they are intrested in. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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bit hard to keep
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whether
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children
should learn all the
subject
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subjects
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. some people think it should.
However
, some people think
children
should only learn the
subject
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their interested in. In
this
article, I will in illustrate both views and declare my opinion. On the one hand,
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all the
subjects
equally bring two main benefits to
children
. First of all, learning some specific
subject
allows
children
to improve their
ability
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. math and English are the essential
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in our life.
This
is because we can’t without calculation and communication. To be more specific, if
children
dislike Math and didn’t learn anything about math,
then
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can’t solve
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a simple calculation during their daily life. Socialization is another advantage of learning all the
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equally.
In other words
, learning all the
subjects
equally allows us to do social
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successfully.
For example
, if you are in a social event,
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can easily talk with
other
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using
subject
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topic as a chat theme. If we do not learn, it is hard to communicate when we first meet a stranger.
Therefore
, learning all the
subjects
is a beneficial experience.
On the other hand
, learning
subject
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which
children
interested
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in cannot be ignored.
To begin
with, motivation has proved to be possible to study.
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is
due to
the fact that study motivation is
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by
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. if
children
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subject
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which
its
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dislike., they will definitely hate it.
Moreover
, it is necessary for teachers to improve their class content. The more interesting in class, the more
children
like
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.
To conclude
,
although
many believe that
children
should
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learning
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subject
what they are interested in. I still think
children
should learn all the
subjects
equally
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be supported.
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