The government should control the Internet to reduce cyber crime and ensure safety of users. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

yes ,It is true that the utilization of
internet
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takes place
various
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problems
such
as hacking ,
cyber crime
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cybercrime
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etc
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I agree with the
nation
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notion
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that
futhermore
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furthermore
, the
government
should take some
setps
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steps
to stop the usage of
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internet
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Internet
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.
Firstly
,
due to
the easy accessibility of the
internet
people are finding new ways to commit a crime .There are many fraudulent websites that are meant to hack personal information like bank account details and addresses.
moreover
, many of them were easily trapped through the links and lost their money. even many users can get suspicious emails from unknown .
For instance
,many times
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get an email about winning money and
thus
they ask me to give my account information . to save people from
such
crimes
government
should ban the websites .
In addition
to that , the uncontrol utility of the
internet
is making a negative impact on youngsters. many teenagers get addicted and spoil their lives which results in many cases of suicide.
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online games named pubg that cause a main impact on children.so the young ones are the future of the country their safety is the primary thing for us.
Furthermore
,
government
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should encounter
the
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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.
To conclude
, the important era of media and technology is that criminals use the
internet
as an easy source to do
crime
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crimes
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.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of the
government
to save people's lives by controlling misleading information on the
internet
.
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