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Some people think that children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

#people #children #books #pleasure
From a very young
age
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 we are used to
read
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reading
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books
 and
listent
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listen
listens
 to
people
 reading them. It is
an
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a
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 usual activity that gives pleasure and helps
learning
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to learn
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 more
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 about any type of topic little kids are looking for.
However
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 there are some
people
 who think children should only read
books
 for
school
purpose
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purposes
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 and others who believe that it is important
also
reading
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read
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books
 for pleasure. In my
opinion
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 the use of
books
 is equally relevant,
indipendently
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independently
 of the reason or subject. Every teacher in
school
 needs an academic book in order to follow the programme but often they
also
 suggest to their young students some authors to read about. In
fact
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this
 is a very good way to get
know
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to know
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 from another point of view or deeply about a topic already seen in class. Even if some
people
 think
this
 should be the only way possible I believe it could give
to
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the kids the wrong idea that
books
 are only associated with
school
.
On the other hand
, reading funny stories or romance gives satisfaction and it is a cheerful entertainment. Young
people
also
 have the opportunity to understand what they like or what are the stories that
interests
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interest
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 them most, and it should be a choice that doesn't depend on academic performance.
While
school
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schoolwork
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 works
are
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written all the same for every student in order to study, other
books
 are a chance for children to freely buy
books
 about whatever interests them. In conclusion, my position in
this
 essay focuses on the freedom of choosing to read a book for
school
either
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or
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books
 for pleasure. They are both ways to get
know
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to know
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 something new. A child should feel motivated to look for
a
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apply
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content
whitout
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without
 being forced from the
school
.
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