The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.

The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
commuters
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who work in one
of
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European city via four different
transport
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modes (train,
car
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, tube, and
bus
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) in three different years (1960, 1980, and 2000).
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, we can see that
bus
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and
car
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were chosen the most by
commuters
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in 1960 and 2000
whereas
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both modes showed the biggest difference in the number of
commuters
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from 1960 to 2000. In 1960, just under 40% of commute workers went to their workplaces by
bus
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which was the most among the other
transport
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means in the period given
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the percentage of people who commuted by
car
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was approximately 5%, and
this
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was the least. 20 years later, the proportion of
commuters
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using
train
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trains
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and
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bus
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buses
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was around 27% and 26% respectively. Meanwhile,
car
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and tube as commute mode of
transport
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were chosen by just under a
quater
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quarter
of
commuters
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. In 2000, nearly 38% of
commuters
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selected
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car
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the car
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as their
transport
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which was over double that of
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bus
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the bus
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(exactly 15%). The percentage of those who chose to train and tube for commute was a
quater
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quarter
and around
one fifth
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one-fifth
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respectively. Especially when it comes to
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car
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cars
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, the proportion of
commuters
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by
this
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showed the biggest gap during the period given.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words commuters, transport, car, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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