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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless .The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages ?

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youThe importance of an automatic vehicle was always
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controversial by few masses
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 that it is
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beneficial
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 reject the notion.
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 views of favouring
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 will lead to a logical conclusion . To commence with . There are a plethora of reasons behind
this
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 will be resolved .To explain it ,It is often seen that those who go
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journey
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suffer from back pain .
This
 problem would be solved as they would be able to take some rest and short naps
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.To cite an example ,A survey was conducted by NYU (New York University ) Psychological
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 in 2020 among various people who own automatic
cars
such
 as Tesla . They found that 70% of people whose health issues are disappeared since they started to use automatic
cars
.
Hence
 ,From above mention indisputable facts ,it can be clearly stated that many are
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this
 trend.
To begin
 with , One of the main underlying reasons stems from the fact that it would assist to reduce severe accidents on the road.
In other words
 ,driverless
cars
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modren techanology
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modern technology
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 as GPS tracking , To maintain distance between
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cars
 and timely stop a car if potholes are detected .
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 of the Times of India newspaper revealed that road accidents have declined since the launch of driver-less
cars
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 it is proved that
this
 machine plays a vital role to save our precious life. To recapitulate ,
Although
 there are several strong factors supporting the arguments .
However
, their drawbacks must not be overlooked.
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