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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that the government should impose
tax
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 to fix the
health
problem
,
while
 others suggest opposite theories. After careful consideration, I strongly believe that they should find a way to solve
this
problem
. My opinion will be elaborated
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 the following essay. It is undeniable that the government should legislate the regulation to increase the
tax
 because the cost of
food
 will be higher for some
people
 who do not have enough money to buy unhealthy
food
.
On the other hand
, some customers are keen on paying for junk
food
.
For example
, some
people
 have to work early so
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they eat fast
food
 for easy to find which fast
food
 is more delightful for them.
Therefore
, imposing
tax
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 is useless for some
people
 who have enough money. On the other side, I strongly believe that they should find ways to solve the
health
problem
 by providing
sport
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 facilities/ gyms in various places because
people
 will be interested in exercise which will get rid of the
health
problem
.
In addition
, some
people
 eat fast
food
 regardless of their
health
 problems
that
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the government should promote and give
the
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information to
people
 in terms of
health
, nutrition, and eating habits.
For instance
, I read information about obesity caused by fast
food
 which makes me eat less unhealthy
food
. In conclusion, others might say that increasing the
tax
 is beneficial.
However
, I strongly believe that finding ways to solve problems has advantages for decreasing the
health
problem
due to
 providing
sport
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 facilities and giving information.
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