The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
As an introduction, the bar chart illustrates the worldwide Sales of various digital
games
, between the period of 2000 and 2006.
Overall
, it has been shown that the highest figures of all the categories were handheld games
throughout the duration. In addition
, the sales of console games
were
dropped gradually, Unnecessary verb
apply
although
the other three demonstrated steadily
rising trend.
Correct article usage
a steadily
Firstly
, the figures of
handheld ones, rose significantly from about 10 million Change preposition
for
dollars
in 2000 to reach almost 18 billion
dollars
in 2006. Likewise
the number of online Add a comma
,Likewise
games
grew considerably starting from 2001 to end at around 9 million dollars
in 2006. Furthermore
, mobile phone games
increased gradually from 2000 to reach more than 6 billion
dollars
in 2006. In contrast
, sales of console games
declined steadily from about 6 billion
dollars
in 2000 to end up around 3 billion
dollars
in 2006.Submitted by anushka75 on
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