The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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of
minutes
(in
billions
) of telephone calls in the UK, which is divided into three categories, between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
, it is obvious that throughout all years local fixed
line
was the most viral among citizens of
UK
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the UK
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.
However
, reversed positions
seems
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to appear in
mobile
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the mobile
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calls category.
In addition
, over the
period
,
number
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a number
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of national and international fixed, and mobile calls were gaining popularity,
whereas
local
line
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lines
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remained unchanged
at the end
of the
period
. From 1995 to 1999 local-fixed
line
experienced a slight increase in terms of
billions
of
minutes
, from 70 to 90.
Then
,
by contrast
, people started using local
line
calss
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class
calls
less, and by the end of the
period
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,period
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local-
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local line
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line
calls
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call
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usage dropped to its initial amount of
minutes
. Between 1995 and 1999 national and international
fixed
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fixed-line
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line
and mobile consumption increased at the same rate; from about 36 to 50 and 3 to 12 respectively. The
grow
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rate of
minutes
in
billions
increased gradually until the end of the
period
in mobile calls case, ending up with 45 billion
minutes
and 61
billions
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billion
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using national and international fixed
line
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billions, line, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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