IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 8

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe they should only be allowed to study subject which are useful in future like science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #university #students #study #future #science #technology
No doubt,science and technology are an important part of society.Some folks of society opine that students should only learn about these subjects in universities.Others disagree with the statement by saying that it's the learner's choice to take any field of study they like.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and give an opinion
at the end
 and I support the former statement. To start with,
this
 approach will lead to competition.Since each and every learner will pursue only technology and science so entrance exam will be much harder.
Due to
 limited seated availability,toddlers have to compete with each other.
Moreover
, the problem of overstaffing will be common owing to
this
 trend.If everyone will have the same qualifications
then
 it is not practically possible to get everyone the same job.
As a result
,selecting subjects
such
 as arts and engineering would be more suitable for them.
Apart from
this
,if parents make their children take courses under pressure which they are not interested in leads to a waste of money.Lack of interest in fields,they will not do their best result in failure of courses.
However
,by taking science average lifespan will be increased.There are various diseases which are still incurable
such
 as AIDS and Cancer.Finding medicine by so many new students will boost the chance.As far as IT is concerned,various things can be done automatically
due to
 artificial IT which includes building design and making new music;
therefore
 there is no need to take arts.
To sum up
,I think making fewer options available to university toddlers has many drawbacks so it is better to give them the opportunity to study whatever they want.
Submitted by aroraanmol890 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: