The prevention of health problems and health illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree.

Some

people

believe the authorities should allocate funding for

prevention

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the prevention

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health

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of health

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and

diseases

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disease

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issues than

treatment

and

medicine

. I totally agree with

statement

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the statement

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. There are several reasons why hold the idea that prevention is more crucial than

treatment

and

medicine

.

Firstly

, If the government spend money to increase the sports facilities,

such

as gym, swimming pool,

playgrounds

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and playgrounds

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can be beneficial for the public to prevent

dieases

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diseases

.

This

is because

this

facilities

is encourage

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people

to

do

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apply

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exercise and stay healthy.

Furthermore

,

according to

some research adopting

active

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an active

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lifestyle is a great method to enhance the immune system of humans to fight diseases

such

as

,

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apply

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cancer ,heart

attact

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attack

, and diabetes. As result a, prevent

people

to get illness and increase

the

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apply

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life expectancy, which means

mitigate

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mitigating

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the pressure on the healthcare system and the cost of

treatment

and

medicine

is reduced.

Secondly

,

The

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apply

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lawmakers should allocate money to fight air pollution . To illustrate,

people

every

singal

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single

day

breath

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breathe

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air polluted , which means air contamination contributes to health problems namely, cancer,

Ebola

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and Ebola

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.

Therfore

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Therefore

, spending funds

in

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on

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this

issue can prevent

people

to get

dieases

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diseases

and health issues , which means they

less

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are less

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likely to need

medicine

and

treatment

.

To sum up

, it seems to me that government should spend money

in

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on

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prevention measures

including

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apply

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, motivate

people

to

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have the

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the

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a

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healthy lifestyle,

reduce

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and reduce

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the

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apply

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pollution

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more significant

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significant

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significantly

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than

medicine

and

treatment

.