Some
people
believe the authorities should allocate funding for
preventionCorrect article usage
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healthChange preposition
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and
diseasesChange the noun form
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issues than
treatment
and
medicine
. I totally agree with
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.
There are several reasons why hold the idea that prevention is more crucial than
treatment
and
medicine
.
Firstly
, If the government spend money to increase the sports facilities,
such
as gym, swimming pool,
playgroundsCorrect word choice
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can be beneficial for the public to prevent
.
This
is because
this
facilities
is encourageChange the verb form
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people
to
do Unnecessary verb
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exercise and stay healthy.
Furthermore
,
according to
some research adopting
activeCorrect article usage
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lifestyle is a great method to enhance the immune system of humans to fight diseases
such
as
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cancer ,heart
, and diabetes. As result a, prevent
people
to get illness and increase
the Correct article usage
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life expectancy, which means
mitigateWrong verb form
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the pressure on the healthcare system and the cost of
treatment
and
medicine
is reduced.
Secondly
,
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lawmakers should allocate money to fight air pollution . To illustrate,
people
every
day
breathReplace the word
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air polluted , which means air contamination contributes to health problems namely, cancer,
EbolaCorrect word choice
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.
, spending funds
inChange preposition
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this
issue can prevent
people
to get
and health issues , which means they
lessAdd a missing verb
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likely to need
medicine
and
treatment
.
To sum up
, it seems to me that government should spend money
inChange preposition
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prevention measures
includingChange preposition
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, motivate
people
to
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theCorrect article usage
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healthy lifestyle,
reduceCorrect word choice
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the Correct article usage
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pollution
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significantChange the word
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than
medicine
and
treatment
.