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You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter •Explain what type of car you would like •Give details of when you would like the car •Request more information about the cost

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Dear Sir. I want to rent a
car
 for a holiday
this
last
 month (from 26 to 29/1/2024). The new
car
 has 7 seats, black colour, air-conditional, player, and a television.
Although
,
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 my family have 3 members, when we travel, we always do many things
such
 as food, drinks… So, we need a
car
 have 7 seats. Black is my favourite colour,
furthermore
, I think that when we are camping on the mountain
this
 colour will add to the mystery. With a long journey so air-conditional will be coming benefits, for it will make the air clean and cool. The player and television help everyone relax on the journey. The time I want to receive a
car
 in the morning on Friday, 26/1/2024. Please fill up the fuel before I take it. The final, please the current price list, I can choose the best for me. Note that I just rented a
car
 when a cost of 30 to 50 dollars. Thank you in advance for your help. Sincerely. Ms Tam.
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greeting and closing
Please ensure to address the recipient appropriately, using 'Dear [Name]' or 'Dear [Position]' if the name is not known.
logical structure
Divide the information into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should represent a separate point or request.
suitable writing tone
Make sure your tone is formal and polite, which is suitable for writing to a professional service.
single idea per paragraph
Clearly state your requirements without including unrelated personal preferences to maintain task relevance and clarity.
complete response
Ensure your letter includes all the necessary information relating to the car rental, including all specific details, without diverging off-topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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