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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Art
 is the externalization of individual skills and reflects the heritage of a
country
. At present,
art
 seems to lose its value because of less concern by the
government
,
however
, I feel that
art
 still requires being given more value than other basic necessities of any nation.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons why
art
 should be the priority of any
country
.First of all, It is the best source of generating revenue income for the
government
. Museums,
art
 galleries, and musical concerts are the place, where a handsome revenue is taken. Mesmerizing sculptures and beautifully engraved paintings by renowned artists adorn the beauty of the museums and attract tourists. Undoubtedly, these tourists are the greatest source of revenue income. These tourists throng in large numbers on these historical places and monuments that help to promote local handicrafts, resulting in providing income to the small-scale industries.
Secondly
,
art
 is the cultural and historical reflection of every
country
. It is the real asset of every
country
 that brings uniqueness and pride to every
country
 and if a fund is not allocated by the
government
then
 it will be difficult to keep
this
 alive.
However
, some opponents of
art
 say that spending money by a
government
 on
art
 hampers the development of the
country
 in regards to good infrastructure, road system, efficient transport system and medical facilities.
Moreover
, allocating money to education and medical facilities definitely lessens the literacy rate and increases the well-being of the nation which helps a
country
 to grow.
To conclude
,
art
 is really an integral part of every
country
,
therefore
, the
government
 should fund
art
 museums and promote artists’ values to keep and maintain the glorify the history of the
country
otherwise
 artists and the
art
 will be lost in oblivion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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