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life was better when technology was simplier.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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days'
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 complicated technological devices has made two diametrically opposed standpoints: for and against
technology
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.
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 there could be found some of its drawbacks, I for one lean towards supporting technological advances. One of the most visible benefits of
the
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cutting edge
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technology
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,
now
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 we take for granted, is saving abundant
time
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.
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, food processors in the kitchen do the chopping much faster and automobiles drive us home in a much shorter
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 than we, humans, could afford without them. Auto driverless cars will eventually save
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driving
time
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 altogether when we come to
reach
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 their requirements. The more and higher of
technology
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, the quicker of doing everyday routines.
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 to the
faster paced
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 pros of
the
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modern
life
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,
humanas
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humans
 have
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 quenched their thirst
of
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for
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 curiosity
by
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with
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technology
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. The huge wealth of knowledge we are endowed
cannot
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 be attributed
with
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to
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 anything rather than the search engines and the smart artificial intelligence
embeded
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embedded
 into Google, MSN,
Fire Fox
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FireFox
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, and the other platforms of virtual surfing.
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 but not least, the advent of
technology
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 in the field of medicine
have
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 made us capable of beating
life
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-threatening diseases
such
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 as malaria, tiburcolusis, etc.
Life
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 would have been sweeter 2
hundreds
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 years ago during the Spanish
Influensa
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Influenza
, had the scientists discovered effective vaccines prior to that fateful illness. We, the 21st-century homo sapiens, have been saved from the Covid19 pandemic thanks to the pharmaceutical effects of its
vacciens
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vaccines
 we have just got for granted. Yes,
technology
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, not only saved us from the vicissitudes of
the
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history
,
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 but
also
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 provided us with speed and knowledge. On the other, it must be said that
,
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technology
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 per se has not been flawless. There are some people who claim that we would be having
a
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cleaner-smelling air in
the
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nature had
the
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gas-consuming cars not ever arrived. They may
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 believe that the quieter and the slower paced, the more
tranquility
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. That said,
technology
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 by itself brings
solution
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. Hybrid motos tend to leave much
less
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 pollutants. It
also
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 seems too hard to prove what our
life
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 would be like without the myriads of technological advances for the sake of peace and
tranquility
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tranquillity
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 like
the
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recreational activities online. In conclusion, the advantages of
technology
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 outweigh its disadvantages. Ease of
life
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, saving
time
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, and acquiring abundant knowledge are just some of the benefits we take for granted.

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