Some people believe that non-academic subjects at school should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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people
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it's
life
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non academic
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non-academic
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including life
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needs
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Japan
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and Japan
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for the whole day.
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taking
due to
deciplinary
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disciplinary
subjects
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be included and proritize
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prioritize
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them
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the main
subjects
can affect childern
to a great extent. Correct your spelling
children
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a heavy
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passing
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pass
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tolarating
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tolerating
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responsibility
the
school.
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subjects
and focusing
only on main Wrong verb form
focus
subjects
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the influence of competition spreads in the society. As parents and educational authorities better take Correct article usage
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neccssary
steps to Correct your spelling
necessary
over come
negative aspects in the educational system. The best method of Correct your spelling
overcome
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positive thoughts Correct your spelling
implementing
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through
optional Add a missing verb
is through
subjects
like meditation.
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look after
aswell
as mentally.
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conclusion
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it may impact teachers as well. When children are freely enjoying school hours and Add a comma
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subjects
even their personalities will also
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