The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the different stages of the production of
bricks
for the construction industry.
Overall
, there are 7 main stages in the process of how
bricks
are produced, beginning with the digging of the
clay
, and ending with the delivery to where they are sold. In the first stage, using a digger machine, the
clay
is dug and placed on a metal grid for the purpose of taking out the bigger
clay
.
Next,
after the
clay
is mixed with sand and water,
this
mixture underwent two options, one is cut by a wire cutter to become
bricks
and the other is moulded to
be
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bricks
. In the following step, the
bricks
are dried in the oven for
from
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24 to 28 hours. After that, they continue to be experienced in the kiln with a moderate temperature of 200-800 Celsius, and a high temperature of 870 – 1300 Celsius. They are
then
put into a cooling chamber for 2 or 4 days before being packed. The
last
step involves in delivery of
bricks
in a large truck, transporting them to where they are sold.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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