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The plans below show the layout of a university sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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 the looks of
an
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 university's sports centre in the present and future state. Those illustrations can be clearly seen as the plan for the redevelopment of the facilities.
This
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 the layout and compare both.
Overall
, the plan will be changed except for the middle main parts. All of the outside areas are removed and combined to extend the indoor area.
Furthermore
, some additional shops are
also
 added. To start with,
gym
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 location
is
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still
remain
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 but
it's
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 size has enlarged two times from its original.
Next,
on
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 the eastern part, they are going to add two more dance studios beside the fitness
center
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. Apart from that, on the western side of the changing room, they are planning to add a brand new leisure pool
as well as
 an additional changing room in front of that.
Last
 but not least, the cafe and sports shop are placed near the entrance
accres
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access
 from each other.
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