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One problem face by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is true that issues are
one
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 of the most concerning for the society. The
traffic
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 congestion nearly every big city faced that
problem
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also
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 is becoming more widespread. There are several reasons for
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problem
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 and various measures could be taken by the government and individuals to improve the situation There are a variety of different factors that have led to
traffic
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.
Firstly
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 lack of public
transport
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such
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 as trains, buses and the underground.,
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one
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 reason might be avoiding taking public
transport
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 inflexibility at the
time
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 so they decide not to waste their
time
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 waiting
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according to
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 a survey in Alhamra magazine people every day lose
time
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 about 1-hour for
waiting
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 public
transport
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.
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,
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honestly
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 it is more convenient to drive their own car with no
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 with them everything is clean they do not need to stop many situations to reach their place
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 why make
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 is worst.
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, they are several ways to solve
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problem
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. First of all , the government had to work hard to solve that issue like increasing the number of the bus, and metro and making the
time
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 flies to use.
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 make luxurious public
transport
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 for the rush people so that can be used.
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 good illustration for
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,
I
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is I
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had been to Paris five years ago and I used the subway it was terrifying for me because
i
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 was dressed up too much so I did not look like them
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 why I had robbed since that I think a lot if we have luxury
transport
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 definitely I will use it In conclusion,
traffic
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 congestion is the most issue today. But the government play a big role in
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problem
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 they must move forward to solve it. The best solution is to increase the number of public
transport
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such
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 as buses, trains and ships
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