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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycle are banned from the city centre. People are encouraged to use public transport such as buses, taxies and metro on vehicle-free day. To what extent do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Pollution is increasing at
the
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an

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 alarming rate and is becoming
the
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a

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 global issue. The government is prohibiting the use of automobiles on certain days and is encouraging the use of public transport. The majority of folks support
this
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 idea due
its
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 number of merits
while
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other
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others

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 focus on demerit points. To a large extent, I think there are more benefits than risks. And my preference is argued
further
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. Initiating with the benefits the first and foremost one is city traffic will be under control.
However
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,
this
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 will lower the accident rates. To cite an example, the Indian government is
following
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this
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 concept ,
due to
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 which they have seen a tremendous improvement in the quality of air. Another benefit that can strike the mind of the people is the use of petrol, diesel will go down.
Thus
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, saving our natural resources and following sustainable development. On the darkest side, there are several drawbacks.
Firstly
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, during an
,
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apply

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emergency it will be hard for an individual to reach the destination on time. Another drawback can be, there is
chance
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a chance
the chance

The noun phrase chance seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 that people might reach late to work or school by relying solely on public transport.
For example
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, the bus drivers in TTC
tells
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tell

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to
Correct pronoun usage
us to

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 take another bus as the current one is full.
Last
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 but not least, public safety might be at risk as hate crimes are increasing nowadays.
To conclude
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, despite
of
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apply

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some threats of using the city vehicle,it can be taken care of by close vigilance. So it can be said that
definitely
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,definitely

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 the pros outweigh the cons.

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