More and more people are finding it increasingly important to wear fashionable clothes. Is this attitude to wearing clothes a positive or negation development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, any
kinds
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of
developments
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development
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can be monitored through social media.
This
includes contemporary fashion. Many youngsters do not want to be outdated,
hence
they are following
that
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what
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are
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is
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trending on screen.
This
essay will share my thought on why I feel
this
is a negative development.
Firstly
,
people
tend to buy attire that
are
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less needed in order to keep updated with the trend.
This
leads to impulsive buying and there are vast consequences lead from
this
issue.
For instance
, they will waste money on something that
are
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not necessarily useful, and gradually, it will lead to hoarding behaviour. They do not want to throw their old clothes
to
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into
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a new one
that is
more trending.
Secondly
, most of
fashionable
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clothes are expensive. Being forced to wear these types of fashion,
people
will tend to buy fake brands’ attire. One of the consequences of
this
conduct is most likely will affect the brands’ income,
it
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will lessen.
Thirdly
, many young
people
fear
of
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being avoided by their friends or peer if they do not follow what is currently trending.
This
seems like an either-or situation, they are scared to be shunned by their community. In conclusion, following a current
fashionable
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trend is more
into
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negative impact. Many
people
are being forced just to keep up with their
friend
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friends
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. They will buy the things that are less needed as well. Sadly, teenagers do not feel
object
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with regard to
this
behaviour because they
also
find themselves
impressive
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with wearing fashionable apparel.
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