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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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Those bar charts depict
people
from
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 several ages and sex in
music
 listening. It is clear from the graph that many
people
love
 Pop and
Rock
music
.
According to
 what is shown
people
 in 45+
prefer
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 listen to classical
music
 rather
then
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 Pop and
Rock
, but most
of
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the
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males and females
Love
rock
music
 with 25% for males and 15% for females respectively.
Moreover
, we can
noticed
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 that not just 45+
people
love
 classical
music
 because
people
 in the 25 to 30 has more than 15%.
However
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 the females wear equal in both
of
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Pop and
Rock
music
 and it was the same in the 45+.
To sum up
, we could say that many
people
love
Rock
music
 until the 45+ ,but
with
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less than 10%.
Moreover
,
it is clear that
 a lot of
people
 in 16 to 24
heat
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hear
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 classical
music
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, music, love, rock with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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