nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of thechnology. in what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? has this become a positive or negative development?

It
Add a verb
isIt
wasIt
show examples
certainly true that
technology
altered the methods of
individuals
to communicate. In my opinion,
technology
make
Change the verb form
makes
show examples
our
globally
Change the word
global
show examples
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
convenient, and I believe
this
a
Add a missing verb
is a
show examples
negative trend. The first change of
technology
in
method
Add an article
the method
a method
show examples
of
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
commuication
Correct your spelling
communication
is become
Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
show examples
possible for
people
to make new relationships with
people
from various backgrounds ,cultures, and languages.
This
change can
boosts
Change the verb form
boost
show examples
culture
Replace the word
cultural
show examples
diversity, which the opportunities for
individuals
to learn
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
new traditions and help them to see the world from a new angle.
For instance
, Facebook and
twiter
Correct your spelling
twitter
today is the most popular platform to make friends
instead
of
traditional
Correct article usage
the traditional
show examples
way .
Secondly
, modern
technology
make
Change the verb form
makes
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
relationships very
stronge
Correct your spelling
strong
.
This
because
Add a missing verb
is because
show examples
individuals
can stay in touch with loved ones regardless of
geographically
Change the word
geographical
show examples
location. For
examle
Correct your spelling
example
,
people
who study or work abroad can make video
call
Change the form of the verb
calls
show examples
via smartphones with their families and friends ,
this
can assist to reduce the feeling of loneliness and
isolated
Replace the word
isolation
show examples
. In my perspective,
this
development can bring
severals
Correct your spelling
several
show examples
detrimental impacts
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
individuals
.
Firstly
,
technology
contributes to
make
Change the verb form
making
show examples
people
feel isolated and
introvert
Replace the word
introverted
show examples
.
This
is because they lose face-to-face
incteraction
Correct your spelling
interaction
interactions
.
Secondly
,
Interact
Wrong verb form
Interacting
show examples
via
smarphones
Correct your spelling
smartphones
or computers encourage
people
to adopt
sedentary
Add an article
a sedentary
show examples
lifestyle.
Therefore
, they
vulnerable
Add a missing verb
are vulnerable
show examples
to
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
serious diseases
such
,
obesity
Change preposition
as obesity
show examples
, heart attack,
cancer
Correct word choice
and cancer
show examples
.
To sum up
, it seems to me that
technology
changed our way to communicate dramatically we make friends worldwide, and keep in touch with loved ones,
however
,
this
trend
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
harmful
consequencs
Correct your spelling
consequences
including,
people
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
become isolated and
motivate
Wrong verb form
motivated
show examples
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
to
inactive
Add an article
an inactive
show examples
lifestyle.
Submitted by faiz3177 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: