The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
The line graph presents
an information
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information
a piece of information
show examples
on the cause of
air
pollution
in
the
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apply
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Britain between 1990 and 2005.
This
chart focuses on
air
pollution
originating from transportation, industry, and households.
Overall
, the graph shows the tendency of several
contanimants
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contaminants
in the UK every three years. In 1990, the factory
peacked
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peeled
at the most emissions and
then
, it
constiually
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continually
descended for 15 years. Meanwhile, the
trend
of transportation discharge
slighly
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slightly
ascended. Looking at the detailed data, the data of industry showed a significant
declive
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decline
from around 5.5 to 2.5 between 1990 and 1999 and
then
,
slighly
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slightly
dropped.
On the other hand
,
hoseholds
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households
maintained the amount of
air
polluted material at around 1 during the first 9 years with one dip and spik and
then
, it diminished by almost 0. The part of transportation and household is not an important factor that
lead
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leads
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to
overall
air
pollution
trend
. But when looking at the overview
trend
found that
air
pollution
trend
to decrease.
In addition
,in 2005, it is a low point
of
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in
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total
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the total
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amount of discharging
air
contaminants in the
air
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, trend with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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