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Some people believe that students work better if the teacher is strict; others think it is better for students, if the teacher has a friendly approach. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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A few decades earlier
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 and they punished them in bad manners. Nowadays
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 habit changed to a good manner and punishments go away. Some believe restricting has merits and others think a friendly connection is worth it for both parties.
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in fact
teachers
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 were very cruel and they use sticks to punish pupils, and they stood up under the Sunlight. The main reason for
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, in those days
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 did not understand the value of education and the parents were
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 not educated. To make sense,
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 treated them in cruel ways. But the wonder is those
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 still respect their tutors as their gods. The disadvantage of
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 is, some students give up schooling and used
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 they can not face neglection. When we look at the other side, students love behaving with
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 as friends. Because friends know each other's ups and downs. Nowadays a friendly school atmosphere become increasingly popular. In
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 ,practice both parties can stay happy,
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 doing their studies. Why are we getting so much pressure in our lives
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 It is really wonderful
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 when we see
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 who walk along the school holding
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' sarees. These practices are very important to make an eternal bond between these two parties. School is the second home to a child. If the home has a harsh environment, they will become astray.
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, I had a friend who was really good at mathematics, one-day the maths teacher blamed her and punished her, the next day she gave up coming to class and now she is going to a garment for sewing.
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 should practice how to make valuable students to society, without crushing
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's blooming minds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • disruptive behavior
  • academic expectations
  • sense of urgency
  • perform to the best of their abilities
  • real-world environments
  • rules and deadlines
  • approachable
  • nurturing learning environment
  • participate actively
  • ask questions without fear
  • reprimand
  • interactive and engaging
  • effective learning
  • stressful learning environment
  • lack of respect and discipline
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