n some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion.

Salary
is one of the important aspects of being a worker. With getting
salary
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,
people
can continue on with their lives by paying bills, buying food, clothes or even tertiary needs.
However
, there are few
people
that earn enormous amounts of income and creating debates in regard to
this
issue. The following essay will discuss
about
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the good and bad
on
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being paid high salaries and what should governments do about it.
Firstly
, a considerable amount of income might be beneficial to the
country
. The bigger the
salary
that workers get, the bigger the tax that they need to pay to the
country
. In fact, these taxes are being used
to
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the development of the
country
itself,
in other words
, they are helping their
country
indirectly.
For instance
, taxpayers are assisting a family in poverty, creating a better educational system, developing
an
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advanced technology,
developing
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a greater infrastructure.
Hence
,
this
will lead to a better
country
to live in.
By contrast
, an
extreme
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high
salary
will
also
emerge social discrepancy
among
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society. We can see obviously between
community
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communities
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who are rich and poor.
This
issue will create an envy behaviour towards other
people
and the tendency of indigent
people
to become wealthy will elevate criminal activities.
For example
, by being obsessed to look prosperous, they become thieves. In conclusion, there are good sides and bad sides
on
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getting profound earnings.
However
, it is still
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government
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tasks
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to have
a
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strict
regulation
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in regard to
control
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controlling
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this
extreme paying issue.
This
is
also
to avoid a social gap in the society of the
country
.
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