n some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion.
Salary
is one of the important aspects of being a worker. With getting salary
, Add an article
a salary
people
can continue on with their lives by paying bills, buying food, clothes or even tertiary needs. However
, there are few people
that earn enormous amounts of income and creating debates in regard to this
issue. The following essay will discuss about
the good and bad Remove the preposition
apply
on
being paid high salaries and what should governments do about it.
Change preposition
of
Firstly
, a considerable amount of income might be beneficial to the country
. The bigger the salary
that workers get, the bigger the tax that they need to pay to the country
. In fact, these taxes are being used to
the development of the Change preposition
for
country
itself, in other words
, they are helping their country
indirectly. For instance
, taxpayers are assisting a family in poverty, creating a better educational system, developing an
advanced technology, Remove the article
apply
developing
a greater infrastructure. Correct word choice
and developing
Hence
, this
will lead to a better country
to live in.
By contrast
, an extreme
high Change the adjective
extremely
salary
will also
emerge social discrepancy among
society. We can see obviously between Change preposition
in
community
who are rich and poor. Fix the agreement mistake
communities
This
issue will create an envy behaviour towards other people
and the tendency of indigent people
to become wealthy will elevate criminal activities. For example
, by being obsessed to look prosperous, they become thieves.
In conclusion, there are good sides and bad sides on
getting profound earnings. Change preposition
to
However
, it is still Correct article usage
the government
government
Change noun form
government's
tasks
to have Fix the agreement mistake
task
a
strict Correct article usage
apply
regulation
in regard to Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
control
Wrong verb form
controlling
this
extreme paying issue. This
is also
to avoid a social gap in the society of the country
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