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Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc.to serve Society.Discuss both views and give ur opinion

#people #university #education #work #car #mechanics #builders #society #ur
Report on
gym
 The purpose of
this
 report is to outline the best and the worst parts of our
gym
,
as well as
 to recommend improvements to the facilities. The data for the report was collected based on the opinions of club members. There are a lot of great aspects.
For example
, there
are
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is
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 a lot of space, where
people
 can train. There
are
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is
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also
 a lot of
sport
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sports
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 equipment.
People
 say that they spend hours exploring
this
 place. The building looks modern
expensive
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and expensive
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 inside and outside. In spite of all
good
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the good
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 aspects, it's hard not to see some bad aspects.
Staff
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The staff
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 are very rude and sloppy. It's impossible to communicate with them. They are getting on
people
's nerves. And there's one more bad aspect.
People
 aren't attracted to
this
gym
, because costs a leg or an arm to train in
this
gym
. Suggestions & conclusions.
The most
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Most
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 part of the staff must be made redundant for their
behavior
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behaviour
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 and attitude
to
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towards
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 members. If
manager
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managers
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 had thought more about choosing workers, the
gym
 wouldn't need an advertisement and changing stuff. If the
gym
 was more popular, prices wouldn't be needed to be so high.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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