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Why do students prefer doing part time jobs during their studies? Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, a number of
students
 prefer doing part-time jobs
while
 doing
studies
 as they belong to poor families or they want to be independent in managing their expenses. It has more pros as compared to cons.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in the subsequent paragraphs. To embark with, doing
part-time
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the part-time
a part-time
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 job with
studies
 has more advantages for
students
. The predominant one is that if they do
work
 in order to earn money
then
 they could know the value of money and can learn about useful skills
such
 as time management, spending money on useful things and so on.
This
 would be beneficial for mentees if they perform
work
 in a team. A survey conducted by the BBC (British Broadcast Corporation) revealed that 78% of
students
 got success in their life as they did
work
 when they were at school.
Moreover
, not only it will be fruitful for
students
 but
also
 it would be worthwhile for their families if they do part-time struggle
while
 doing
studies
 as they can support financially to their families and they have not to depend on their parents for managing their expenses for
studies
.
However
, it has some cons which are important to consider. Whenever tutees perform
work
 during their
studies
 at that time they are not able to study as they could easily be distracted From their
studies
.
Due to
this
,
students
' performance could be decreased. Without, doing better
studies
 young ones could not be able to get well-paid jobs. Doing more
work
 and study could lead to numerous health problems for
students
such
 as depression, anxiety and many more. A survey conducted by the world health organization demonstrated that 89% of youngsters suffered from stress and anxiety as they did a lot of
work
while
 doing the study. In conclusion,
although
 getting a part-time job
along with
studies
 has more benefits for learners, it has a few drawbacks which cannot be overlooked.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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