Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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It is certainly true that today
people
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rely on
machines
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to done
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houseworks
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housework
rather than by
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hands
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. In my perspective, the upsides of
this
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trend outweigh the downsides. In terms of drawbacks,
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using technology to
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houseworks
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housework
encourage
people
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to adopt
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle.
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, nowadays,
indiviuals
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individuals
depend
in
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on
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machines
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in order to clean
the
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apply
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dishs
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dishes
or clothes
instead
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of doing
this
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by
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hands
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hand
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,
this
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negative trend because doing
by
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it by
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hands
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hand
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is consider
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exercise and
burn
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burns
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calaories
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calories
.
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, increase
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chance for
people
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to develop serious diseases
such
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,
obesity
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as obesity
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, heart attack,
cancer
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and cancer
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.
Furthermore
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,
people
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lose their skills to deal with
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houseworks
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housework
, which means if any cut down of electricity occurred
people
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face challenges to cope with their
homeworks
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homework
.
However
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,
despit
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despite
these downsides, I would like to argue that the pros outweigh the cons ,
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depend
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on
machines
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to doing works
in
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at
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home
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the home
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can
safe
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a considerable
time
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for individuals.
This
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because
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people
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spend a lot of
time
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in
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at
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work and they do not have enough
time
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to do house works by their
hands
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, which means
machines
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can create
time
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for
people
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to relax or spend
time
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with their families
instead
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of doing
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houseworks
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housework
,
also
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this
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help
people
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to achieve work-life balance.
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,
machines
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can
a
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apply
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plays
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play
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a key role to protect
people
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from
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the spread
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spread
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spreading
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diseases
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of diseases
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.
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, putting dirty clothes in washing
machines
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is more safer than doing it by
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hands
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hand
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.
As a result
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, help us to stay healthy away
form
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from
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viurs
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viruses
and bacteria.
To sum up
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, it seems to me that the benefits of utilized of
machines
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in order to
doing
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do
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houseworks
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housework
work
is
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are
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far
significant
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more significant
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than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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