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The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart illustrates the data collected in a survey about buying and drinking habits of
coffee
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 and tea of the residents in five
cities
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 of Australia in the
last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, in most of the
cities
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 except
Adelaide
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, people who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea are higher than the other two categories.
While
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 in
Adelaide
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 the percentage of those who bought instant
coffee
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 is slightly higher.
To begin
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 with, people who bought instant
coffee
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 in all of the
cities
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 fluctuated from 45% to 54% which is in Sydney and Hobart respectively.
Although
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 Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 showed equal percentages in the fresh
coffee
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 category(34%), the other three
cities
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 changed by around 40%.
Moreover
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, people in Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart reported 62%,64%,56% and 63% respectively in the segment of going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea, which is the highest of them all;
however
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, in ,
Adelaide
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 those who bought instant
coffee
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 category is a bit higher (50%).

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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