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Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future. Others think they should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Today,
University
 education is changing and becoming better and they have a lot of learning direction for
students
. So some people think that the
skills
 needed for employment should be controlled by the educational institution's curriculum.
However
, other people believe that
the
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academic
study
 is a more important thing that they should pay attention to. I partially agree with 2 opinions on the educational institution. First of all, an academic education should focus on the
skills
 of employment for the future. It will be very important for
students
. Because it helps them can help them self-up and does not need
to
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help from family, they will have a lot of experience in their life that makes them confident in
work
. They
also
 use their
skills
 to get a high salary
work
 easily, understand the importance of knowledge when they gained, and
then
 they will choose a
work
 suitable for them in the future.Especially, a brilliant
university
 will attract amounts of experts and researchers in some special majors.So that the school will obtain more honours 、awards bonuses and so on.
This
 helps learners to be approached by many professional teachers that encourage them to try in studying, and even from there they can communicate with people who are having trouble managing.
On the other hand
, Others think they should focus on academic
study
 only. Academic
study
 is an indispensable part for
students
. If
students
 were taught carefully, they will have more good knowledge of
work
. They will develop new
skills
 to catch up with improvement. They will be practised a lot in the majors they
study
 to serve in the future. So that
university
 will produce many candidates with high
skills
,
then
 they can attract and make their
students
 have an impressive see about that process. The world economy is changing, so it is very beneficial to provide the needs in special jobs related to technology, manufacturing, business, and finance,… In conclusion, Nowadays, a
University
 education should combine the
skills
 of employment and academic
study
. Finding a method to teach them to
students
. Because they are very vital in
work
 and even in life
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