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Some People think that exercice is the Key to health, white others feel that having a balanced diet is more imrortant. Discuss both sides an give your opinion

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Health
 is essential for us to keep going on with our daily lives. Without
health
, our regular activities will be hampered.
Hence
, it is important for us to keep our
body
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 as fit as possible. In my opinion, there are many ways to keep us healthy, either by doing a regular workout or simply by eating healthy food. The following essay will discuss the
important
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 of
both
 activities. Nowadays, there
a
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lot of platforms and tools that we can use to track our
health
. Gym locations are spread all around the globe. People will find it very easy to go there and
doing
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 their exercises. Doing a regular workout have many
benefit
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 for our body.
For instance
, it will burn
your
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fat, increase your heart rate, feel
us
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calm and
comfort
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 if we join yoga class, and the most important thing is for us to feel fresh. These activities will elevate our
health
.
In other words
, balancing our diet by eating healthy and fresh food
also
 will make us healthy. We can find
this
 type of nourishment very easily,
such
 as in the supermarket or traditional markets around us. We should measure our calories prior
eating
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 and pill out our plate with carbohydrates, fresh fruits, vegetables, and other nutrition. By doing
this
 clean eating, we can keep our
body
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bodies
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 fit and fresh. In conclusion,
both
 doing exercises and eating
balanced
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 diet
is
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 important for us to keep healthy. If we only do one, it will be useless.
Therefore
, it is necessary if we do
both
 simultaneously
,
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 because
both
 of them are complementing one another.
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