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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates
that
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the large of money used for
books
 in Germany, France, Italy and Austria during a decade.
Overall
,
Germany
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book-users
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book users
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 accounted for
a
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the
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 highest proportion of US
dollars
 over a period,
whereas
 Austria spent the least money on
books
 from 1995 to 2005. In 1995, people spent 80
millions
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dollars
 on
books
 in Germany,
reached
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 a peak at nearly 100
millions
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million
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dollars
 in the final year, 2005. Following the upward trend, French people read
book
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books
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 and spent approximately 60
millions
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million
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dollars
 in 1995 and raised gradually to 75
millions
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million
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dollars
 in 2005. Italia
idividuals
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individuals
 started at 50
millions
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million
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dollars
 for reading
books
 in 1995 and fluctuated around 50 to 55
milions
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million
dollars
 from 1995 to 1999,
then
 peaking at over 60
millions
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million
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dollars
 in 2005. Eventually,
Autria
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Austria
 people just spent 30
millions
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million
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dollars
 for reading textbooks in 1995 and significantly developed over 70
millions
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million
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dollars
in
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at
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 the end of the period.
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