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one of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
lack
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 of food all over the world is becoming
essential
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 problem and leading some people to believe that the only way to solve
this
 is
consuming
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by consuming
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 genetically modified
foods
. I totally disagree with
this
 idea for several reasons. In my opinion, consuming artificial
foods
 is a way for numerous diseases like cancer, allergy, weakening
eye sight
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 and so on.
For instance
, genetic modification of food passes
by
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through many chemical processes during its production which means no natural content is included in it.
This kind
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 of
foods
 are enriched with lots of vitamins as having
a food
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food
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with
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full of vitamins leads to
the
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obesity of people.
Furthermore
, people having GM
foods
 are facing some illnesses like cancer that cure for disease enquires not little endeavour, how
many
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 stress they can face up with and how much money they spend for
this
.
Moreover
, it seems to me,
production
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 of
genetic
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 modified
foods
 can cause for losing some kind of natural products completely by the time
due to
 not cultivating plants, paying not enough attention for raising
a
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cattle and others. To come
to conclude
 that
i
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am completely disapprove
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 of
opinion
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the opinion
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 consumption of artificial man-made products as a solution for
lackage
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lack
package
leakage
 of
foods
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food
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 around the world.
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